Monday, December 1, 2008

Personal Meditations-Revised

Driving down the highway on a clear sunny day I was not paying attention when I noticed a tire in the road. I swerved onto the shoulder and started to lose control on the loose gravel. I swerved back into the four lanes of traffic almost being hit head on by an 18-wheeler truck. The next thing I knew I was in the air looking at the ground underneath my car. When the dust settled from the crash I realized that I was upside down with my ponytail stuck underneath my car. The sunroof had been open. Men froma construction site came and lifted the car off of me. I had a 6 inch gash in my head that went down to the bone. I should have died several ways in that crash. As a little girl I only lost one person I loved, my great-grandmother, and yet I never realized how short life was. As I enter into my mid-twenties I see death and sickness all around me. Parents have cancer, heart attack, seizures and yet the sickness and death do not stop at the old. Their are children with bone cancer and leukemia. I was in two nearly fatal car accidents within a year of each other between the age of 17 and 18. It is amazing to think of how many things I have done in my life that God has saved me from. I always thought that life was such a happy wonderful thing to live, how niave youth is. Now that I am older I realize that life has happy moments and a person needs to cherish those moments in the times of sadness. Because those happy moments and God are the only thing that will get you through the sadness of this world. The brevity of life is something to wonder at.

1 comment:

camccune said...

Better. I like your use of details, especially "upside down with my ponytail stuck underneath my car."

But your lead still sounds flat. Too much prologue; you need to get to the good stuff more quickly. Here's one way to take the same info and make it more dramatic, and more of a story:

When the dust settled, I realized I was hanging upside-down in my car. The sunroof was open, and
my ponytail was caught underneath the roof.

Just a moment before, I'd been driving down the highway on a clear sunny day. Then I'd swerved to avoid a tire in the road, hit some loose gravel on the shoulder and lost control.

My car shot across the four lanes of traffic, almost colliding head-on with 18-wheeler. The next thing I knew I was in the air looking at the ground beneath my car.

Then, impact. And there I was, hanging upside-down.

Men from a construction site...


11+1=12.5/15