Tuesday, September 2, 2008

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PITTSBURG-U s Air Airplane coming from Chicago crashed yesterday killing all 131 passengers and crew on board. it is the worst air disaster in the United States in the last three years. The crash occured as the plane was beginning to descend, it plummeted into the ground.
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camccune said...

Close, but get to the crash and people killed more quickly. Also clean up the style, capitalization and punctuation:
"A U.S. Air airplane...."
"It is the worst...."
Also tighten up that last sentence.

8/10

September 5, 2008 at 6:20 PM

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