Wednesday, September 10, 2008

Missing Boy (Lead 4)

N.J.- 7 year-old boy was found after three years.
Monday evening a neighbor called the police after recognizing the child's picture, which was shown after the movie Adam: The Song Continues. Ellen Lynn Conner, the boy's mother is facing charges of kidnapping and interference with a custody warrant.

1 comment:

camccune said...

Don't start a sentence with a numeral -- write it out (e.g., Fifteen not 15).

Figure out what needs to be in the lead paragraph -- and what doesn't. (Hint: the part about the mother can come later -- the real news is that a missing boy was found.)

Include where the boy was found in the lead.

Please revise and republish this assignment. Add the word "revision" to the title so I can spot it and reevaluate it.